Cover Letter Misdirection

I received a resume from a job seeker with a cover letter that created false expectations.  The cover letter indicated that the job seeker was currently employed with the Federal Bureau of Investigation.  It didn’t give any details of the individual’s career – just that he worked for the FBI.

I expected the job seeker to have a law enforcement background.  We work with a lot of former military officers with security, law enforcement and intelligence background.  Reading that the individual was from the FBI, I assumed that he had a background that was related to these fields.  I was completely wrong.

The job seeker was a public relations specialist, with significant marketing, graphic design and multimedia design experience.  Although he interacted with law enforcement personnel, his role was entirely focused on PR. 

The problem with the cover letter was that it directed me down a particular thought process that was unrelated to the candidate.  A much better cover letter would have highlighted the public relations experience of the job seeker.  Mentioning the FBI in the cover letter is good, but emphasizing the career of the job seeker is essential.  The best cover letters show the value that a job seeker will provide an employer.  This requires describing past accomplishments.

Because my firm works some security positions, I read the resume close enough to understand the candidate’s experience.  If I specialized in graphic design and PR roles, there’s a chance that I might discard the resume after reading just the cover letter.

When you write your cover letter, make sure it focuses on the value you would bring to an organization.  This requires you to create a clear picture of what you do and how successful you are at doing it.  If you don’t make this clear, the impression you give may not match reality.

A Job Seeker on Vacation

Just when I thought I had seen it all, a job seeker threw a new curve.  I received a resume that had this cover letter:

Dear Recruiter:

I'm interested in <job title>. I'm confident I'd be a good match for <job title> position coupled with my <industry> background. So, I've attached a copy of my resume for your review and further consideration.

I've provided additional information to further assist you in consideration for <job title> position. I'm available IMMEDIATELY and would appreciate the opportunity to meet with you for a personal interview. I'm currently on vacation in <vacation destination> so a phone interview would be ideal at this time.

Salary is negotiable, however is primarily driven by the high cost of living in the <metro> area, therefore request an annually comp. package in the range of $##K – ###K.

In the interim, I thank you for your attention, consideration, and anticipated response.

With kind regards, I am,

There are a number of mistakes in this cover letter.  The grammar needs work.  I deleted the personal identifying information, so it may not be as obvious to you as it was to me.  The job seeker is not in the marketing field, so we'll use this as an example.  The first sentence is structured like this: “I'm interested in Marketing Manager.”  All it would need is a couple more words to read much better:  “I'm interested in a Marketing Manager position.” 

Although the grammar is a problem, it's not the reason I decided to write about this cover letter.  The second paragraph is what caught my eye.  In one sentences, the job seeker emphasizes their “IMMEDIATE” availability for an interview.  Then in the next sentence, they explain that they are actually unavailable and discuss where they are on vacation. 

I'm not sure if I've ever read a cover letter that talked about a job seeker's vacation before.  This is information that does nothing to help sell the candidate.  There is no reason to provide this. 

The situation is made even worse with the statement regarding the immediate availability.  The job seeker makes a statement and then in the next statement, admits that the claim is actually a lie. Don't lie in your cover letter or resume.  It doesn't make a positive impression.

The rest of the cover letter doesn't help.  I don't think salary information should be in a cover letter (unless you are responding to an ad that specifically requests it).  If you decide to include your salary, don't try to justify it.  Your background should demonstrate why this salary is appropriate for you.  By justifying the salary with a statement of the high cost of living, the job seeker sounds apologetic and unsure they are worth this salary.

This job seeker is completely outside my firm's recruiting specialty, so there is no way I would pursue them.  If they were in one of the niches we work, I would probably delete the resume based on the cover letter.  The cover is bad enough that I would be concerned about the risk to a client relationship by presenting someone like this.

Worst Cover Letter Ever

Below is the cover letter from an resume I received by email this week:

**************Plan your next getaway with AOL Travel. Check out Today's Hot
5 Travel Deals!
(  — Link to AOL Travel —  )

This email wasn't spam.   There was a resume attached and it was from a job seeker interested in an opportunity.  Other than deleting the link, the text of the cover letter is complete, exactly as I received it.

This isn't really a cover letter.  It's the signature that AOL automatically puts in every email sent out.  It would not have taken much time to put in a message.  At the least, the job seeker could have written something like this:

To whom it may concern,

Please accept my resume for consideration.

<Job Seeker's Name>

My version would be a bad cover letter, but significantly better than just an AOL Travel advertisement.  What the job seeker sent was just terrible.

My Reaction

When I opened the email and saw an ad, my first reaction was to delete it.  The one word subject, "Resume," caught my eye right before I hit delete. I realized this was actually a submission from a candidate and not spam.  I very surprised that this didn't end up in my spam folder – it is just an ad.  Somehow, it slipped through. 

As I write this, I haven't decided if I'm going to open the resume.  The "cover letter" has given me enough information to know whether I want to represent this candidate.  Even if the resume looks good, I have to question the professionalism of a candidate that sends each resume with just a travel ad.  If they aren't willing to spend a few seconds typing a short message, how committed are they to their job search and their career? 

Bottom line: Make your resume submission a persuasive sales pitch for you – not for AOL.

The Pontificating Cover Letter

Occasionally, I receive a resume or cover letter that tries to convey the capability of the job seeker by giving their opinions on management issues.  This is what I ran into today. The first line of the cover letter is:

The art of motivation and the need for qualified managers will always be essential to the population at large.

I really don’t know what the motivation is to pontificate on the “art of motivation” but statements like this don’t help a job seeker.  A cover letter should be designed to create interest in your resume and answer any key questions your resume doesn’t cover.  A cover letter is first and foremost a sales letter. A statement of the value managers provide to our society doesn’t help sell the job seeker. 

I’ve run into instructional statements like this a number of times.  Usually, they seem to come from one of two places – managers talking about leadership or technical people talking about the importance to quality.  There are exceptions – one resume I read a few years ago had an entire page about the importance of the music of Christina Aguilera. The worst part was that the job seeker was not pursuing a career in music or anything even close to the music industry. I wish I was making this up.

The example from the resume I read today really isn’t all that bad. It’s only one sentence and it’s far from being controversial.

Giving an opinion risks several things.  First, if the hiring manager disagrees with the conclusion, it will cause them to question the qualifications and judgment of the job seeker. I have run into examples that take a firm stance above a single leadership technique or style and alienate anyone with a different leadership style. Second, even if the reader agrees with the statement, they may consider it just a bunch of B.S. This can lead to doubt about everything the resume.

My feeling on opinion statements is that they waste my time.  I don’t read resumes to learn about management, leadership or quality – I read them to assess job seekers.

Remember that your cover letter and resume are sales pitches for why you should be hired. Extraneous information that doesn’t support that end should discarded.

Cover Letter Worst Mistakes

Although there were a lot of mistakes in the cover letters we benchmarked, six stood out as the worst.  Below is an excerpt from our Cover Letter Best Practices Report.

Worst Mistakes

Being Unprofessional: Using an informal salutation won’t help and most likely will make a poor impression. If you aren’t going to address the letter in a serious manner, why should a hiring manager take your resume seriously.

Being Sexiest: It was surprising to find cover letters addressed “Dear Sir” and “Gentlemen.” Even if the job seeker intended no offense to female hiring managers, by addressing this way, they are showing that they are not aware of how this might be perceived – not the impression you want to make. Even with male hiring managers, this will make a bad impression. Most hiring managers will conclude that the job seeker has the potential to be an EEOC or Sexual Harassment liability. The downside for the company is too great to risk, and the job seeker’s resume will probably be discarded.

Wrong Customization: A number of the submissions were addressed to the firm, not an individual. In these cases, one spelled the name of the firm wrong and one had left the name of another company in the salutation, forgetting to replace the name from the last time they sent the same cover letter. Needless to say, neither of these mistakes made a good impression.

Spelling: The majority of cover letters had no spelling mistakes. The ones that did have mistakes, tended to have multiple mistakes. The two spelling mistakes that were the most entertaining were:

– A job seeker, in the first sentence of their cover letter, wrote that they were “seeking a challanging, new position which will utilize my skills and allow me to make a substantive impact.” They should focus on the challenging task of learning to spell challenging.

– A job seeker wrote a lengthy cover letter that focused almost entirely on an MBA they recently received. The letter was 2 paragraphs, 178 words, dedicated to their education and how it would be a benefit to an employer. This would not be a problem if they could spell the University of “Pheonix.”

My Name Is: A number of cover letters start out with the first sentence stating the name of the job seeker. The first sentence of a cover letter is the most likely to be read. Wasting this prime real estate on your name makes it much more likely the reader will skip the cover letter and move on to the resume.

Too Much Hype: Some of the cover letters examined were submitted to confidential employers, where the name of the company was not disclosed. Despite this, some of these included gushing statements of how the job seeker was extremely impressed with the company due to their excellent quality, track record and reputation. You can get away with blanket statements like this if you know who the company is. Doing this when it is clear you know nothing about the company will make one of two impressions. First, you are exaggerating everything you write and it can’t be trusted. Second, you’re making up whatever you think the hiring manager wants to hear, so nothing you write can be trusted.

Cover Letter Best Practices

Palladian International conducted a benchmarking survey of cover letters used by active job seekers. This survey examined a variety of characteristics of cover letters in order to identify the best practices that job seekers should employ. The survey also uncovered a number of common mistakes that job seekers make.

Best Practices

  1. Write a Customized Cover Letter: Very few of the submissions included a customized cover letter. The vast majority either omitted the cover letter or had an overly general letter. Personalizing a cover letter’s salutation and customizing the body of the letter to the position will help create a compelling presentation. Customization also demonstrates effort and initiative.
  2. Give a Reason to Hire: The vast majority of cover letters made blanket statements similar to “I am confident that I am the best candidate for the position” or “I am confident I will be extremely successful in your organization.” These statements do little to help impress the hiring manager. One of the primary purposes of a cover letter is to generate interest and sell the job seeker. Do this with tangible accomplishments. A very limited percentage of cover letters focused on significant, specific accomplishments. Including just one accomplishment can help validate the remainder of the cover letter and get the hiring manager excited. The best cover letters had 3 or more accomplishments that directly related to the position the job seeker was pursuing.
  3. Give Information Not on the Resume: Only 8% of cover letters gave a reason why the job seeker was looking for a career change. This is a question that virtually every hiring manager will want answered. More importantly, if your cover letter and resume make a strong case for your track record of success, the question may come up: “If they are so good, why are they looking for a job?” There can be a lot of good reasons to look for a job. If you don’t include your reason in the cover letter, you open the door for doubting the credibility of your success.
  4. Keep it Short: The best cover letters had between 150 and 250 words. Letters that were 400+ words, on average, contained less content and were less valuable than the shorter letters.
  5. Make it Easy to Scan: The best cover letters utilized bullets with titles making it easy to scan the letter quickly. This improved the readability of the letter. Cover letters should draw the reader’s attention to the most important information. Once the reader focuses on the key points, they are more likely to read the entire cover letter and then read the resume thoroughly.

Cover Letter Advertisement

What if companies wrote ads the way most job seekers write cover letters? Here’s my version of a direct mail letter that you might receive from a car company:

Dear Car Buyer:

We are seeking an individual to buy a car we are selling. Our ideal customer will have good credit and be willing to pay top dollar. We strongly prefer customers that will provide repeat business to us. We are in need of boosting our revenues and are looking for an opportunity to grow our profits. I am certain you will find the car we are selling is ideal for fit for your needs.

This car is a true standout in market. It drives and provides an excellent means of transportation. In addition, it offers the ability to carry goods in various storage locations as wall as convey multiple individuals.

We are absolutely certain that, if you just give us a chance to prove our car in a test drive, you will agree this is the best car on the market for you. With it’s excellent track record, it is certain to make a substantial impact on your goals.

I look forward to setting up a test drive for you today!

Sincerely,

Mega Car Dealer

If you received this, would you rush out to buy this car?  What make and model of car does the letter describe?

I receive cover letters like this all the time. They have no personalization. The benefits the job seeker might provide one of my clients are so general that they are meaningless. The letter focuses on the needs of the job seeker. Finally, too many cover letters make over exaggerated claims of being perfect for the company, but give no reason why they’re any good.

Covers Letters Still Important

The following article details a study on cover letters , and shows how important they are.  If you want to make a good impression on a hiring manager, a good cover letter is the first step.

UN’COVER’ A NEW JOB
Cover Letters Still Play Valuable Role in Hiring Decisions, Survey Suggests

MENLO PARK, CA — As the job application process increasingly moves online, some job seekers might be tempted to think a formal cover letter is no longer necessary — not so, a new survey shows. Eighty-six percent of executives polled said cover letters are valuable when evaluating job candidates. Moreover, eight out of 10 (80 percent) managers said it is common to receive electronic resumes accompanied by cover letters.

The study was conducted by an independent research firm and developed by OfficeTeam, a leading staffing service specializing in the placement of highly skilled administrative professionals. The survey is based on telephone interviews with 150 senior executives from the largest companies in the United States.

Executives were asked, “When evaluating prospective job candidates, how valuable is the cover letter that accompanies the resume?” Their responses:

Very valuable

23%

Somewhat valuable

63%

Not valuable at all

  14%

100%

Executives also were asked, “When you receive a resume electronically from a job candidate, how common is it for that resume to be accompanied by a letter of introduction or cover letter?” Their responses:

Very common

37%

Somewhat common

43%

Not common at all

18%

Don’t know

    2%

100%

“Submitting a resume without a cover letter is like not shaking hands when meeting someone for the first time,” said Dave Willmer, executive director of OfficeTeam. “Those who aren’t including cover letters with their resumes are missing an opportunity to make a good first impression and set themselves apart from other job applicants.”

Willmer added, “A cover letter should demonstrate the applicant’s knowledge of the company, highlight applicable skills and work experience, and explain any resume anomalies, such as extended employment gaps.”

OfficeTeam offers the following seven tips to help job seekers develop strong cover letters:

1.     Name names. Address your letter to the specific hiring manager rather than including a generalized introduction. If you don’t know the hiring manager’s name, call the company and ask.

2.     Do your homework. Research the company online and demonstrate how your knowledge and skills fit the job and could benefit the organization.

3.     Solve any mysteries. If you have any long employment gaps, explain how you filled the time. Mention professional development courses or volunteer activities that show additional efforts to keep your skills current.

4.     Leave something for the resume. Limit your cover letter to one page, if printed, or a few paragraphs, if submitted in the body of an e-mail.

5.     Make a plan. Demonstrate your excitement for the position and conclude by identifying next steps such as, “I’ll follow up with you next week to discuss meeting in person.”

6.     Read and reread. Just as you would scrutinize your resume, take time to review your cover letter for typos and grammatical errors. Have a friend or mentor read it as an added precaution.

7.     Be a savvy submitter. When applying through online job boards, always choose the option to add your cover letter to your resume. When e-mailing application materials to a hiring manager, paste your cover letter within the body of your message.

Survey Methodology
The national survey was conducted by an independent research firm and developed by OfficeTeam, a leading staffing service specializing in the placement of highly skilled administrative professionals. The survey is based on telephone interviews with 150 randomly selected senior executives at the nation’s 1,000 largest companies.

About OfficeTeam
OfficeTeam provides businesses with the highly skilled administrative talent they need to maximize productivity, achieve cost efficiency and support full-time staff. The staffing firm has more than 300 locations worldwide and offers online job search services at www.officeteam.com.

Cover Letter Example

Here’s the first paragraph of a cover letter I got today.

Hi,

I am <Full Name> and I am looking for gainful employment with a company that is seeking professionalism, transitional skills, and someone to become an asset to their company.

My first impression is that this is a little too informal – I don’t see many cover letters that start with “Hi”. After this, the introduction of “I am <Name>…” is a waste of space.

The rest is very bland. It essentially says that the job seeker is looking for a job and that the company they want to work for will hire people that professional, skilled and a benefit to the company – as opposed to all the companies out there that try to hire unprofessional, unskilled people that are a detriment to their company.

Another problem with this is that the job seeker doesn’t say they meet these very low requirements.

Now, this job seeker is actually a senior manager in the IT field, and they have some good skills and experience.

Here’s a reworded version that I would prefer:

To whom it may concern:

I am an extremely experienced IT manager with a successful track record of selling large IT systems to commercial and government customers. I am seeking a sales management or account management role, where I can utilize my experience at opening new accounts and winning government contracts.

The reason I like this working is twofold. First, it is specific. It states clearly what the job seeker is seeking. Instead of “gainful employment,” the role and industry are clearly mentioned. Second, the statement goes on to show what the job seeker will do for the company – open new accounts and win government contracts.

Remember, the cover letter is just a teaser to get the reader interested. It should focus on how the job seeker is going to provide a benefit to the company – and not just say “and be an asset to the company.”

A Good Cover Letter

Here’s a cover letter that I got with a resume:

I am currently looking for a position with a biotech or medical device company in the <Metro Area> area. I have over 5 yrs experience in the pharmaceutical industry and over 10 yrs total in sales. I am extremely driven and I have many accomplishments to my name.

Thank you in advance for reviewing my resume. I look forward to the opportunity to speak with you.

I like this cover letter a lot. It’s very concise, so I’m likely to read it. That’s the key – I usually don’t read more than a few sentences of a long cover letter. If you write several paragraphs, I’ll probably just read the first sentence of the first two or three paragraphs, and then skip on to the resume.

The letter is specific, giving the industry and geography the candidate is seeking. It also provides some interest with some information on the job seeker’s experience.

A cover letter doesn’t need to be several pages long. In fact, a short cover letter is much more likely to get read.